Dorm life is a better way to live compared to home life.When living in a dorm, you are on your own and realize personal responsibility is a result of your independence. Besides the many life lessons learned in a dorm, life itself is less of a hassle. A person does not have to commute, and could leave five minutes before class without being late. In a dorm, you are living amongst friends, and it is a great way to meet new people.According to a study conducted by The University of Washington, although students who dorm have the tendency to have their GPA drop, they still prefer dorm life over home life.(4). Home life does not compare to dorm life due to the lessons learned, its convenience, and the overall fun of living on your own.
Dorm life can not be compared to home life. In a dorm, there are always activities going on, and there is always something to do. When living amongst your peers, you often have similar interests, and you are forced to associate with one another. People meet new people, and strong friendships are created. According to Meghan Oleary, "When you live in a dorm, it's hard to be lonely. There's always someone hanging out in the hallway looking for a friendly conversation."(2). Personally, a dorm has given me many activities to do. I have made so many friends, and there are constantly people coming in and out of my dorm. Sometimes, I feel like being left alone, however I am glad that there are so many friends who want to go out and have a good time. Dorm life definitely has a positive impact on an student's social life.
On the contrary, home life does have some benefits. A college education is extremely expensive, and by living at home a student would not have to bear the expense of a dorm. However, there are millions of scholarships out there to pay for college expenses. According to a survey done by Natwest Student Money Matters in 2006, 1 in every 5 university students live at home during their studies, and this trend is steadily rising.(1). However, it can be inferred that 4 out of 5 students are not living at home, and 80 percent is an etremely large amount. At home, a person has all of the privacy he or she needs, and does not have to deal with friends constantly, especially in a co ed dorm can often lead to controversy. However, the amount friends and good times had overrides the lack of privacy. lt is better to have friends constantly involved in your life than no one at all. A student has a lot of distractions in a dorm, where at home a person has more time do take care of important things, and to study. Yet college years are supposed to be the most fun time of a person's life, and a person could easily balance studying and having a good time.
Dorm life is extremely convenient for a student. To be able to wake up five minutes before class starts, and not be late is great. Many people have class and a break between class and have nowhere to go. It is convenient to be able to get a couple of more hours of sleep before going back to class. According to Naomi Rockler, "lf you feel like rolling out of bed at 9:45 to go to your 10:00 a.m. class? No problem if you live on campus! You can walk everywhere that you need to go and don't have to deal with the hassles of parking and commuting."(3). Food is available constantly in the multiple cafes on campus, and everything is a walking distance away. Me being an athlete living on campus is ideal. The baseball field is my backyard, and the fitness center is across the street. In the winter time, there is a batting cage constantly open for baseball players in the school, and this is a 2 minute walk from where I sleep. For non athletes, there is a pool hall and many other fun activities to do. Food, fun, and class are all so close, therefore the convenience of a dorm is unmatched.
Dorm life is extremely convenient for a student. To be able to wake up five minutes before class starts, and not be late is great. Many people have class and a break between class and have nowhere to go. It is convenient to be able to get a couple of more hours of sleep before going back to class. According to Naomi Rockler, "lf you feel like rolling out of bed at 9:45 to go to your 10:00 a.m. class? No problem if you live on campus! You can walk everywhere that you need to go and don't have to deal with the hassles of parking and commuting."(3). Food is available constantly in the multiple cafes on campus, and everything is a walking distance away. Me being an athlete living on campus is ideal. The baseball field is my backyard, and the fitness center is across the street. In the winter time, there is a batting cage constantly open for baseball players in the school, and this is a 2 minute walk from where I sleep. For non athletes, there is a pool hall and many other fun activities to do. Food, fun, and class are all so close, therefore the convenience of a dorm is unmatched. 
Living in a dorm teaches a person many life lessons. In a dorm, a person is forced to make their own decisions, and learns how these decisions impact their lives. A person has no one to tell him or her to go to class, and not to go out the night before exams. According to the College Life, "Some college students don't mind living with their parents. And some do. When you're living away from home, your parents will have a whole lot less say in your everyday life-- and to many students, that's exhilarating."(4). Before I came to college, I was very sloppy and did not know how to cook. After three months on my own, I could fend for myself, and learned how to be responsible. I set time aside for doing laundry and cooking, yet I still have time to study and go out. Dorm life has taught me that I must manage my time wisely, and that many of my decisions effect me as well as the people around me.
Dorm life is a better way to live than home life. Although home life has its advantages, it does not compare to the experience of living in a dorm. There is constant fun in a dorm, and living amongst your peers always gives a person something to do. It is extremely convenient to live on campus, especially not having to wake up early for class. Living in a dorm teaches responsibility, and teaches a person how to make decisions and live with the consequences of those decisions. Dorm life is indeed the best way to live.
I enjoyed seeing your videos in class and again on my computer. They're really great, but try putting them into one single video with transitions to make the packaging of the essay with the images neat and clean. The essay has this "realistic" quality to it that I love. It doesn't sound like it's trying to hard to sound "like a college student". It is informal in a good way because it makes the essay relateable. You mention in the essay that living in a dorm means not having to wake up extra early for classes and that is a good point, but I think you repeat it quite a bit in the essay. I would just mention it once. I would eliminate the first sentence of your last paragraph because I think you say the same thing in the last sentence of the essay, just with different wording.
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I think your essay is very good. You clearly outlined your points in separate paragraphs which were well organized. I think I only saw one counterargument, you could add two more. I think your thesis paragraph is great. It is short and spicy and straight to the point, you also clearly listed your arguments along with your reasons. I also think you have too much pictures. You could delete the last one.
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